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neuralmop · #1 Post by **neuralmop** » Fri Jan 28, 2005 5:07 pm

Recently I wrote a hack of a story for English. It's here.
http://www34.brinkster.com/restin256/procession.txt

Written on a high of industrial rock. It was written due to me not being able to finish and shorten another story by the deadline (I'm still working on it). Here.
http://www34.brinkster.com/restin256/ruinner.htm

Directive · #2 Post by **Directive** » Fri Jan 28, 2005 5:45 pm

Well, this is what I got when I clicked the first link:

HTTP1.1 STATUS 403 Remote Access to this object forbidden

<html>
<head><title>Direct Access Forbidden</title></head>
<b>This file cannot be directly accessed from a remote site, but must be linked through the Brinkster Member's site.</b></body></html>

The second link works fine. So far its not to bad.

#3 Post by **palmboy5** » Fri Jan 28, 2005 7:00 pm

through glance it looks to the format of other stories, which is good XD

neuralmop · #4 Post by **neuralmop** » Sat Jan 29, 2005 3:12 pm

Heh, I'll need to fix that.

Thanks about the second one, though.

neuralmop · #5 Post by **neuralmop** » Mon Jan 31, 2005 3:55 pm

http://www34.brinkster.com/restin256/procession.htm

You have to close the image to the right, though. Today in English my teacher read that to the class and said we should make a short film about it, but I don't know how to go about killing someone like that with improvised special effects..

#6 Post by **palmboy5** » Mon Jan 31, 2005 4:03 pm

o.O;; i should read these things ^^

neuralmop · #7 Post by **neuralmop** » Mon Jan 31, 2005 5:01 pm

Well, you could just watch the movie when it comes out..

#8 Post by **palmboy5** » Mon Jan 31, 2005 5:28 pm

LOL with a buncha weird freaks? nah ^^